McClure Middle School follows through on its zero-tolerance for bullying policy by suspending 28 students allegedly involved in bullying a fellow student on Facebook. In the article entitled “Cyber-bullying leads to suspension of 28 middle-schoolers at McClure,” Linda Shaw reports McClure school administrators took action once they heard a Facebook page dedicated to harassing one of their students was posted.
Administrators are taking this as an opportunity to set an example for students how might be thinking about cyber-bullying a classmate and to discuss with parents and students about safe and appropriate Internet usage. Lisa Fitch, co-president of McClure’s PTSA, agrees with administrators decisions. Fitch is proud of McClure Middle School’s positive reputation, and is sad to see it splashed all over national news that the student body has a cyber-bullying problem.
“Cyberbullying leads to suspension of 28 middle-schoolers at McClure” is a brief article that starts out with a basic news headline and lead. The lead draws a reader in, but the awkwardly worded nut graf disrupts the reader’s flow. Accurate information is present throughout the piece, but many sentences are passive and much like the nut graf.
Shaw employs a variety of sources from school administrators to PTSA members to the director of Washington’s Office of Education. These sources add dimension to the quotes and attributions that fit into the organization of the piece without overpowering it. On the other hand, objectivity is limited as there is no mention of any parents or local citizens opposing the school administrators’ decision to suspend all 28 students.
Besides some awkwardly worded sentences and limited objectivity, the reader is left with an understanding of the events that have occurred at the McClure Middle School.
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